Space Chimp

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My coconut crab claw. A coconut crab claws is strong enough to break a coconut.

My Learning Goals

My Learning Goals in Feb

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:when,who,where,why.  
• Sequence of events:  What happened?
• Personal comment: How did the events make you feel?

     

              Scariest Day ever

                         

The buffaloes are walking along the river bank. It was a bright sunny day but then I said OMG! I can see a group of lions! I told my dad but he would not listen. I just kept telling him, but he could not hear me. His big feet were too big and he was making a lot of stomping noises. Then I told my mother and she thought I was joking, to scared the buffalo's but then she saw some prides of lions. Then that is when my dad stopped.  Then he  roared like a mighty Lion King. But the lion did not get scared then he said\ run for your lives. The lion's started to run after US! But then one of the lion got me. I felt hurt and terrified and they tackled me into the river. But then a few minutes later suddenly a crocodile swam up   and tried to take me away from the lions. So then they had a game of tug of war, I felt like I was  the rope. I thought that I would break in half I was scared. But then I felt the ground thumping like thunder I was surprised that my mum and dad had come back. I just could not wait I started to say mum dad  help me. Mum said that’s what we are here for I was scared I thought that they will never get me.

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:when,who,where,why.  
• Sequence of events:  What happened?
• Personal comment: How did the events make you feel?

The red is my improvements.

              Scariest Day ever

                   Second draft The buffaloes are walking along the river bank. It was a bright sunny day but then I said OMG! I can see a group of lions! I told my dad but he would not listen. I just kept telling him, but he could not hear me. His big feet were too big and he was making a lot of stomping noises. Then I told my mother and she thought I was joking, to scared the buffalos but then she saw some prides of lions. Then that is when my dad stopped.   Then he  roared like a mighty Lion King. But the lion did not get scared then he said run for your lives. The lion's started to run after US! But then one of the lion got me. I felt hurtful and terrified and they tackled me into the river. But then a few minute suddenly a crocodile swam up and tried to take me away from the lions so then they had a game of tug of war I felt like I was  the rope. I thought that I would break in half I was scared. But then I felt the ground thumping like thunder I was surprised that my mum and dad they came back. I just could not wait I started to say mum dad help me mum said that what we are for I was scared I thought that they will never get me.

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:when who  
• Sequence of events:  What happened?

             

               Scariest Day ever

It was a bright sunny day as I was going around the river bank with my family. It was December and  early morning. I could see a group of lions lying in the sun ready to pounce on my herd of buffaloes. I tried to keep close to my mother. But I know I am feeling threatened because they are going to get me first because I am weak!

The buffaloes are walking along the river bank. But then I said OMG! I can see a group of lions! I told my dad but he would not listen.I just kept telling him, but he could not hear me. His big feet were too big and he was making a lot of noise. Then I told my mother and she thought I was joking, but then she saw some of a group of lions. But then that is when my dad stopped and so did the herd of buffaloes. I know that is about to pounce on me because I am slow.